Sugapuelffuns (Soogapoolfuns)
The Sugapuelffuns is an elephant like creature who lurks with intent in the forest, only to show himself to those who believe in him. Most don’t think he is actually real. He is a dark brown color with long fur and big feet. His long nose drags on the ground and his bushy tail follows right behind him. On a typical day you can find the Sugapuelffuns smelling flowers and eating grass. He is a kind creature and never harms another. The Sugapuelffuns is a vegetarian, eating only plants from the ground. Most of the time the Sugapuelffuns is very lonely because he is only seen to those who believe in him. He does have one friend though. Her name is little duck. Below is a picture of the quaint being. So innocent.
*inspired by the Sesame Character Snuffleupagus
This was quite the adorable post. I actually considered using this character also because since he is imaginary, it lends itself really well to creating a story for him because we know he exists but we don't actually know anything about him. This fits well as an encyclopedia entry-you did a great job giving over the facts and giving us a good picture, but I would also love to see it be a little more poetic in terms of the language. Great job...it made me smile!
ReplyDeleteThis is such a cute monster! I loved the imagery of his nose dragging along the ground. As stated above I don't really see the poetic aspect to this post. Also if there was no picture I would not know what the monster looked like fully - just that he looks like a dog which clearly he does not. Either way it was so cute!
ReplyDeleteThis is such a cute monster! I loved the imagery of his nose dragging along the ground. As stated above I don't really see the poetic aspect to this post. Also if there was no picture I would not know what the monster looked like fully - just that he looks like a dog which clearly he does not. Either way it was so cute!
ReplyDeleteThis was a fun monster poem, and I agree with the others that it is quite cute. One thing I noticed is that you stick pretty close to the original from Sesame Street. I wonder if it might be more creative and interesting if you made the Sugapuelffuns different from the Snuggleupagus. Perhaps in revision you should even explicity compare them.
ReplyDeleteWhat makes them unique creatures? What habits does the former have that the latter does not? Do they have any physical differences? Going into such details might improve the poem by distinguishing your new monster from the classic original.
This poem is very cute and it has a childhood feel to it, like Sesame Street. By using the word "lurk" at the beginning I thought you were going to change this monster into a scary being so maybe change that word to something more subtle. I like the idea that he only shows himself to those who believe in him, really adds to the characteristics of this monster. I also like that it was mentioned that he is a vegetarian. Maybe instead of simply saying "big feet" you can think of a softer way to say it. Using words like "delicate," "fragile," "graceful" (ect.) will add to the large monster not being harmful. Overall, great job!
ReplyDeleteThis is very sweet, but I want more! I'd like to see how the creature acts in different circumstances. Also, you talk about how nice it is so much that I expected it to have some secret or random badness to it. Maybe add some intense flaw to make it more interesting?
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