Satisfaction
I wake up with determination
Today it will be different.
There’s so much that I want to do
and only I can make it happen
I wake up with Determination
where in the world is my gym shoe!
I’m going to hit the finish line
five, ten, fifteen, twenty, 26.2
I wake up with determination
a blank page with taunting pain
my hands tingle ready write
the words come to my brain
I wake up with determination
a tornado hit my house
laundry, dishes, vacuum, sweep
the rush of clean is oh so sweet
I wake up with determination
I'm invisible and filled with fear
my heart beats fast as our eyes meet
he grins from ear to ear
I wake up with determination
I great reward I must find
wake up with determination
go to bed with peace of mind
I really enjoyed this poem!
ReplyDeleteI love repetition because i think it gives it a more clear and dramatic feel and I feel like you did that well.
I also really like how you ended and it was different than the other stanzas, thats what I believe makes poems very strong.
I think you might have made a typo in the last stanza with the word I?
Also I think that maybe using more descriptive phrases so the reader can feel the poem better will be beneficial: such that you did by the phrase "my heart beats fast as our eyes meet"